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As many of you who read my stories know, I've had one story that has been the "Red-headed step child" of my stories - quite literally.
(As the main character is a red head, that tracks).
https://storiesonline.net/s/23522/visiting-aunt-scarlet
Mike McGifford wrote the first few chapters with my feedback way back in 2020. I didn't know how to make AI pictures at that time. I tried to write an ending because I thought it was a great premise.
Instead, I let it sit and sit, unloved and untouched.
Then one day, I get inspired and I started writing more, and illustrating with AI. The main character he wrote happened to have a striking resemblance to Scarlett Johanssen and for AI that's great because I can make a persistent character with a LORA.
One thing that I learned from this and one other story, was never publish a story until you have written it all.
My new process is fairly complex. I free-write every chapter so I don't lose momentum. I go back and polish later. I wont bore you with details but until it's out of a rough edit phase, I won't post it here.
If I did try and edit and polish each chapter, I'd eventually lose momentum like I did with Aunt Scarlet back in 2020. It takes too long to get it where I want it and by then I've forgotten what I wanted in the next chapter.
Through my own creative energies, I managed to get inspired to write the New Foal story, which is quite popular. I've had this NIS: Breeder story for so long that by god, I am going to publish all 77 chapters if it kills me.
I want to do all that before the end of the year.
I also wrote a Mary Christmas story and I want to have it finished by Christmas. It's not doing so hot voting wise but the votes here are skewed anyway.
I ASKED politely in the story notes not to vote until at least chapter seven. Just give it that to see if it grabs you are not. It's impossible to judge from chapter one. However, all 20 votes are from chapter 1 and 2 from people who basically gave me the middle finger and did it anyway.
Which is why I hate voting and tend to think it's more punitive than anything else.
I explained in the story notes that this story starts out a bit grim for the two girls. They are set up by a stepbrother, to get in trouble but it eventually has a happy outcome (as Christmas stories should).
It's kind of like the "Bad Dad" story on Hallmark. You already know the trope. He'll get stuck at the airport and through a series of really unfortunate events he'll learn the true meaning of Christmas and say fuck the Anderson account, and spend it with his wife and kids throwing snowballs at their perfect house.
You gotta go through the crises to get to the end.
Originally it had about 12 chapters. I was QUITE unhappy with the ending I slapped on it. I had another idea brewing that I felt inspired to write.
However, I decided to go ahead and rewrite and expand the ending. If I post a chapter a day every day I won't finish by Christmas.
So, I am doing two a day when I can, to finish NIS as well by the end of the year.
For those of you who want more Aunt Scarlet and Foal: Both have more chapters written but I want to prioritize these others because they are close to the finish line, and Foal and Scarlet have a long way to go to the end.
I apologize about that. I am not pulling a George R.R. Martin on you here. I am just prioritizing to focus on finishing a few before 2025.
I've got one story called "Birthday games" completely finished after that. I've got another one called "Nude Rules," which I am quite proud of that is leading a family toward a nudist household. I've got a bunch of other ideas percolating. However, give Eddie the benefit of the doubt. I love the Aunt Scarlet story, and if you are a fan - I love you too.
It's been waiting this long to get its ending. Give it a little longer, and check out the conclusions of these other two stories in the mean time.
I violated my own rule posting Foal early, because it was so fucking good that I couldn't wait. I learned my lesson there. Finish one, start another.
Once these all get completed, I'll be doing that from now on. There could be gaps in posting a story because I tend to enjoy longer stories.
https://storiesonline.net/n/36875/the-new-foal-a-pony-girl-story/14
My friend Mike McGifford came up with the idea that started Foal. In his original draft, he mentioned a man named Eddie Davidson in casual conversation - but never any details about him.
I've been writing most of Foal, and decided to finally introduce him as my alter-ego and in this chapter I added a picture for your edification.
It's a boner killer for sure, but I think it adds something to the story. They say a picture is worth 1000 words, but it doesn't actually add to the word count of the story.
It does though add a little something to help provide background. Tolkien added maps, and there are some illustrations on covers and inside books just to give enough to help paint the world for the reader.
That's my goal with AI art - its fun to create. I normally do stuff that's sexual in nature, but I decided for one to do a self portrait.
One other thing that I added to this story is a powerful metaphor about shaping raw iron into something more - more valuable through the process of what some may consider pain and trouble.
I can't take credit for this idea. I saw a brilliant craftsman explain that the iron spike he was using had been sitting in the ground minding it's own business. When the spike is introduced to heat (The pain of life/trouble) it may ask "Why me? I did not ask for this".
And the pain shapes it, makes it brittle and easy to mold into something else. It is that crucible process that shapes all of us and can make us into a lump of mush, or something new and even stronger than before.
I know, that's deep, right? This is supposed to jerk off story about sexy hispanic girls that dress up like ponies and prance around with their tits out.
I thought that message was so powerful, that I enshrined it in this chapter, and it is for that reason that it is one of my favorites of all time.
A lot of my stories have fetish elements that some people find distasteful and that's okay, not everything is for everyone. However, I really think this particular chapter would appeal to many even if you arent into kinky leather stuff and elaborate shibari rope bondage.
I've been on SOL long enough to have written 72 stories, many of which are over 30 chapters, some approaching 75 chapters like my latest NIS: Breeder Program
When I began, I didn't have MS Word or any spell check, and I suspect my early stuff was pretty rough on the eyes grammatically.
I have better tools and grown as an author, but the same toxic people who were there day one to knock me down and try to encourage me to give up, are still here - the names may have changed but the tactics have not.
I don't think the voting system on this site accurately reflects the quality of stories, mostly due to the behavior of trolls. There is probably a lot of outliers of 1 or 10, and the 1 is probably from someone who simply ignored story codes, plodded into the story and said "Wait, this has (X) in it and I hate (X)...Down Vote!"
It is a story, it's just NOT for you. You don't have to punish it. Just move on, if you can't objectively rate the prose/grammar/plot structure.
I used to love the idea of collaborative writing, and on some level I still do. I used to feed off of the comments when I wrote "Do you have a big dick, why not?" and "Big Day at Sunny Manor" and even weave some of the suggestions into the story.
However, more often than not, I got a snotty gram from someone emboldened by the anonymity of the Internet to tell me in great detail why they wouldn't read the story - rather than just depart and move on like a good fellow.
Not everything is for everyone, and I've been pretty clear my stuff is for a particular kind of pervert. Most of my fans are engineers or analysts in some way. I am not sure why that is, but perhaps it's because I am.
I hate to think that I write a trope style, but I am sure that I have a "sub-genre" of interests that while I consider them broad, many of my stories reflect common themes.
As an example, I often write an alter ego of myself into the story in the form of a young man or father, and think about the story from their perspective.
In order to broaden that, I really do thrive when people write to me and suggest "hey, what about this direction for the plot instead?"
Sifting through the public comments though is like sifting cat litter for gold, when it's mostly just cat shit that you'll find.
I had experimented on NIS: Breeder and turned on comments. I had about seven pages, and honestly, most of it was awesome. Periodically, I'd go and read them, and if someone thought so poorly of my work they'd go the to trouble of writing a little snotty gram, I could click "Ban from ever commenting on my stories" and delete it and move right along.
Very satisfying.
It would be all the better if I could click "Ban from READING my stories or contacting me" but you take what you can get.
However, recently a few of the toxic trolls have become too emboldened. Unhappy with themselves, they lash out to tear others down.
"I only open this to look at the AI pictures and those are shit as well" type of comments, which are better left unsaid. I am glad they get off on the AI pictures, and if they don't want to read the story, I am fine with that too.
You see? and since I have little interest in what this troll enjoys, why should I hear about what they do? Why should anyone?
So, experiment ended - no more public comments.
However, I'm always game to talk to people who want to engage on my stories, make suggestions, catch mistakes I made in continuity or grammar, etc.
Now, it will be solely through the "Contact author" button.
I especially like it when a fellow author takes the time to reach out and offer some thoughts.
We (most of us anyway) do this for free, and we enjoy sharing our little fantasies with people for probably a multitude of reasons. In return, getting that validation from feedback freely given from readers to make my stories better and more diverse, is a really satisfying reward.
I don't need anyone to blow smoke up my ass and tell me I am the best author. I know that I am not.
Am I trying to be the best author?
Probably not either, if I were I'd set up a Patreon and try to make this my living.
However, just getting someone to take a few minutes of their time to provide some good feedback is great. That's something to aspire to.
The few readers who have stuck with me over the years and offer feedback, is a very small group of grognards who keep me going.
Years ago, someone wrote to me to complain about the direction of my story. At first, I was upset, but I realized something.
They were not angry with me, not really. They were mad that their favorite characters were going down a path they felt was bad for them.
What an honor!!
It's kind of like if you made Captain Kirk grow a mustache. The character is so iconic and beloved, that many people might not like it. They are not as much mad as they are passionate that the character stay true to the readers perception of them.
If you write characters no one gives a fuck about, and have them do something in the story that puts them in peril, no one will give a crap.
He was writing because he had an emotional reaction to a character I made real for him through our shared imagination. How cool is that?
I got to experience the feeling of accomplishment, because someone thought enough to write to me a very strongly worded email about the direction of the story.
That's one I didn't mind at all. it's the toxic "You are shit, this is shit, eat shit, you dumb shit" type of comments or the "I am not reading this!" from the dimwits who think I want them to announce their departure.
What do they think is going to happen? I'll hold my breath until they come back? IDGAF. If it's not for you, please don't read it. It's not FOR you.
If you are digging the story and I take a detour, well that's sort of my style. I will gladly spend three chapters writing about a single night at Rocky Horror Picture show and relish every word of it.
I am in no hurry to end my journey with the characters. The experience may not "move the plot" from Act I to Act II. It's still allowing others to live viscerally in the setting through the narrator's eyes.
Helping the reader smell the air, the fragrances of flowers, or the salt of the sea, to imagine the sun shining down on their faces just as it is the characters, and letting them hear the sounds in their head through descriptive word is just as important as plot development. I want you to experience this world, identify with it, feel like you know it - even if it's not YOUR personal world you live in now.
I may take you back to where you were in 1987, or a future that would be cool to imagine. In order to do that, I may envision a scenario within the story that simply enhances, without necessarily accelerating the plot. I make no apologies for the occasional detour in the story.
However, if you genuinely have some thoughts of constructive feedback and ideas about story direction, or just want to share continuity concerns, or grammar mistakes you discovered - I would love to hear them. I may not use them, but it's a gift and food for thought that may send me down a different path that was inspired by your feedback combined with my own depraved imagination.
I often write the entire story, or at least several chapters ahead, so it's not always possible for me to accommodate those kinds of requests any longer. Such is the case with NIS: Breeder.
The latest story arc posted around chapter 57, the daughter (Julie) wants to experience what it's like to be a sex worker in an authentic setting. She was challenged by her mentor at school to do things that make her feel "ick" but aren't true physical limits.
She also wants to help her friend and she thinks she can encourage her to go to college through her example of self-sacrifice. I don't think I am giving away much of the plot there, because you don't know how that goes (unless you are reading this a long time from now, after I conclude the story).
I had someone comment tonight (Which was really the final straw) that it made no sense, and "There was no plot".
Bitch, there are 60 chapters of this woman going from shy housewife to brazen naked submissive to her daughter. That's your plot. Where do you want me to shove it, so you can find it?
I am sure he downvoted me, and went off to contribute jack shit to the website except for his toxic negativity. No changing people like that.
In closing, believe it or not, I found a second site that hosts stories. I won't post the URL because that's a naughty thing to do here. However, I've never seen any toxic comments there.
It's all people posting encouraging things like "This is great, can't wait for the next chapter" and "I enjoyed the story, here are a couple notes!"
Imagine if all the toxic trolls on this site would just drop off the planet? nothing of value would be lost and we could just enjoy perverted stories and encourage new authors to write.
Instead, they seem to be waiting to pounce on new authors who write a theme they don't like to discourage them. Tools designed to empower creativity, are often mis-used like public comments, voting, forums and the private mail.
They find ways to get under the skin, undermine, kink-shame, and it works, so why would they ever stop?
Their time clearly has no value, since this is their aspiration. As time vampires, their goal is to suck away anyone else's time - as they did mine reading their gibberish.
You can choose not to engage in almost all of those too except voting. Sadly, it's on by default at chapter one. That's way too early. It's before anyone has an idea of how a much longer story will develop. That's like voting before you watched the dancer take her titties out.
Open to page one, read the first page and cast your vote on whether this is "not a story". Well duh, it's the first page of hundreds of pages to come.
I tend not to judge until at least chapter seven, as long as the story codes interested me.
You can try your hardest to engage with only people who are not toxic, but sooner or later on the forums or public comments, along comes debbie downer the boner killer to post some toxic comment because their life is so miserable that they aren't happy until they've made others miserable.
Just imagine if the majority of us either kept our mouths shut and moved on from stories we didn't enjoy, or offered encouragement?
It would kick ass.
Many apologies for the delays in publishing new chapters of NIS: Breeder Story.
The story is complete, but editing is what takes so much time. Today's chapter is almost twice as long as most, measuring in at around 12,000 words.
To give you some context, that's about 70kb of space on average, and last I checked there were more than 38,000 entire stories on SOL that were 70kb or less.
It took some time to write the chapter, and polish some of the AI art. I am getting much better at it, and I add my own flourishes manually as well as create the captions.
My goal there is to simply enhance the story by giving a few visuals without making the pictures THE story.
This arc in the series takes Julie and her mother out of the high school and into a trailer park. That's a familiar playground for me to write in. I grew up in one, and all sorts of debauched and naughty things happened to me in them while I did.
Arguably, a story about a high school program should be focused on the high school setting and this one certainly does. However, I have always enjoyed the home life stories about the participants.
I like the dirty little brother who laughs and points, or the concerned neighbor who stares awkwardly scenarios. I like the odd circumstances when people visit and find that the participants are home nudists as well.
The "Exchange" nights provided an opportunity for the participants in the Breeder program to visit each other's houses and observe how they live, even participant in how things work at their house.
That speaks to Julie, and I am hoping the twists in chapter 58 will make the wait worth it.
This is a pivotal chapter in the story that alters a lot of dynamics. Piggy is starting to show and soon she'll be full blown pregnant with engorged tits full of milk. That will be another corner in the story.
However, this one is going to change some of the way they approach NIS all together. If it were a TV show, I'd have saved this chapter for a "Season finale", even though it is not the closure of the story. It ends with some interesting questions about what will happen next.
In other news, I am writing the New Foal: A pony girl story.
https://storiesonline.net/n/36875/the-new-foal-a-pony-girl-story
I had a long time reader say that it was not a mother-daughter story, since so much is about the mother and her feelings. The mother is telling the story and it is definitely the two of them partnered.
Most pony girl stories I read are set in a fantasy world where women can be abducted and then trained into show ponies, or they may agree to be paid by some rich weirdo to give up a year of their life and live on the ranch.
I wanted a different kind of story. I wanted a story about a couple who happen to be into BDSM and specifically into pony play. I wanted to show the reader that it could be normalized in their household - "this is just what mom and dad do on weekends"
And as their son and daughter grow up, they naturally have questions and interests of their own.
I've tried to do things differently than many of my stories in the past. One thing I did, that I sort of regret was start publishing it before I had an ending.
That puts the pressure on me to keep up the pace of writing and not leave the readers hanging. I will caveat this story with: "I can't publish a chapter until it is ready, and I won't."
So, be prepared for a bit of a wait, or just give me the time to finish it before you start on it.
I started with the intent of teasing a new story. I typically don't post until I have written the entire thing.
However, I made an exception simply because I was so excited about this new story to share it with you.
I chose a LORA (persistent character) for the Mom in this story that I thought would be cool, but I am having some difficulties with making pictures with it.
I decided to make a "casting change" of sorts, so soon you will see a revision to chapter three
https://storiesonline.net/n/36875/the-new-foal-a-pony-girl-story/3
If you see an updated date for today or later, that's the new character/chapter. If not, please enjoy the previous Carmen until then.
I have asked for consideration not to vote until I reach Chapter seven. I do thank the people that gave the story high marks, but if you are planning a down vote - please give me until chapter seven with this story to make an opinion on it.
Honestly, I wish authors could decide when people can vote, because chapter one is never enough to make a decision. There must be a point in the reading where you know it's going to interest you and it's usually not the cover, chapter one, or the foreward.
In any case, I also posted up the next chapter of NIS.
Chapter 55 represents an "arc" in the story. You could almost consider it complete with Piggy's birthday party. It's going to get bumpy on this ride after ths point. There are many twists and turns ahead.
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