This just received from a satisfied customer who read newsboy II: "lovely, good thing I ignored the stupid score." Which made me feel better. I was happy with the story when I posted it, but response has been disappointing. Oh, well. A revised version will be posted soon. Peregrinf made a good suggestion for improving the ending, and there were a few additions I thought of myself, which in retrospect appear obvious.
Also a funny reaction to "Strip Shakespeare" from an anonymous, female reader:
Every summer from the ages of 6-16, I went to an
all-girls camp; during the school year, I attended
an all-girls school. I played strip poker in the
barn at our farm probably a dozen times and skinny
dipped in lakes, pool and rivers at least once a
summer from 6-21 years of age. I have to say that
I never saw an orgy or any girl-girl action. A few
male hands help me up the various ladders on
various occasions, though. Does that count?
Well, no, it doesn't. I never saw any all-girl action at that age, either, but this was a fantasy, after all. As I suggest in my profile, my stories are what I would have liked my adolescence to be.