So I passed a story to a compatriot here and he kindly gave me some very good pointers.
Thus what is the problem?
I feel like the story struggles to even be two dimensional.
Maybe I'm too self-crirical? IDK? But I'm definitely having morecthan second thoughts about letting another badly constructed abd finished story out there.
Then there are my five or six horrifyingly flat, not frightening attempts to write a horror story.
How can wordsvseem compelling in my mind, but fall flat when I write them down?