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Yantra Protocol

Tantrayaan 🚫

My first story as a writer. Please do check it out as well as my other story Their Wonder Years:S1

This story should appeal to folks who like Sports Dramas along with Haremlit, Thrillers, Romance, and Mythic Realism

The story is set in India in the year 2000

Synopsis of the story
What if your body was a battlefield — and your heart, a weapon?

Yantra Protocol follows Bharath Hema, a gifted Tamil footballer who transfers to Calcutta's top club with dreams of glory — and finds himself thrust into a war waged in whispers, winks, and wounds.

When he rescues a trafficked girl by accident, he uncovers a citywide sex-trafficking ring run by elites, guarded by violence, and hidden behind velvet curtains. His weapon? A mysterious tattoo — a yantra — that gives him access to dreamscapes and healing power.

His allies? A growing circle of broken but brilliant women who become his partners, protectors, and lovers.

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Blurp 🚫

@Tantrayaan

This and your other story are 2 of the main stories I come to this site to read. Highly recommended both stories to readers

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Tantrayaan 🚫

@Blurp

Thanks so much. Hope you folks continue to like the stories as they keep unfolding.

irvmull 🚫
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@Tantrayaan

Their Wonder Years is absolutely the most fun I've had reading anything on SOL. Ever.

Especially the latest part about the GA DMV. Been there, done that, will bear the scars for life.

And yes, everyone must visit the Varsity. Just like a car, students need an oil change and grease job periodically.

A 10 for sure.
https://storiesonline.net/n/47025/their-wonder-years-season-1

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Tantrayaan 🚫

@irvmull

Thanks so much! Please do check out Yantra Protocol as well. It's a bit grittier than Their Wonder Years.

TheDarkKnight 🚫

@irvmull

OMG, is the Varsity still there? I visited a friend at Tech in 1967, and he insisted on taking me there.

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Tantrayaan 🚫

@TheDarkKnight

Was never a big fan of the Varsity although the Onion Rings were good. Always felt guilty after eating there though.

irvmull 🚫
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@Tantrayaan

It used to be great fun to take a date there, and get curb service.

Experienced folks knew that if you went inside, you were expected to have "your order in your mind and your money in your hand". No time to waste when there are thousands of people waiting for food.

But it appears to have gone downhill in recent years.
Just another example of the general decline that affects every big city, I guess.

Tantrayaan 🚫

@Tantrayaan

How long back was the curb service thing? I lived right next door in the dorms so we used to pop into the place occasionally - although I did usually partake of the Subway right opposite.

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irvmull 🚫
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@Tantrayaan

How long back was the curb service thing? I lived right next door in the dorms so we used to pop into the place occasionally - although I did usually partake of the Subway right opposite.

Started around 1928.
I believe they stopped "car-hop" service due to COVID, and never brought it back.

There's also the special lingo used to order stuff:
"Two yellow dogs walking and a frosted orange" is what I would order to take back to the office.

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Vincent Berg 🚫

@irvmull

As long as it's not the orange frosting the two walking yellow dogs deposited on the frosted orange.

jimq2 🚫

@Tantrayaan

Back in the 80's, I couldn't get in. There was no place to park a semi truck and trailer.

jamie_oliver 🚫

@Tantrayaan

Also a favorite story of mine. I think a lot of people don't read this because it has an Indian theme though - which is sad. It is top notch writing.

Tantrayaan 🚫

@Tantrayaan

Thank you as always!

jamie_oliver 🚫

@Tantrayaan

This novel needs love now that TWY is done. Looking forward to the end of this as well :).

REP 🚫

@Tantrayaan

Your explanation of your story seems very different from the description on your author page. Neither description interest me. Your original post seems like a plea for readers to read your story - I'm not interested.

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Tantrayaan 🚫

@REP

You want me to apologize for asking folks to read my story?

Not sure I understand the intent of this post on a public forum. You could have DMed me with this.

Please don't read if you don't wish to. I don't remember holding a gun to your head.

awnlee jawking 🚫

@REP

I think you just disqualified your stories from Blurp's Haremlits list ;-)

AJ

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Blurp 🚫
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@awnlee jawking

I don't like his work. Just like I don't like yours. What's your problem? Jealous that you're not on my list?

I didn't know you cared if you were on my list or not. It's my opinion.

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awnlee jawking 🚫

@Blurp

I haven't written any harem stories, so you probably haven't actually read anything of mine.

REP has written some pretty decent harem stories, although he doesn't advertise them as such. I'd recommend his stories in the D-Hopping universe.

AJ

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Blurp 🚫

@awnlee jawking

I just wrote above that I don't like his work. Why did you bring my name into this? To have a laugh at my expense? What's your issue?

You don't like Tantrayaan's work. That's fine. I do. Why did you have to bring in my name for no reason. I don't think I've ever addressed you before.

Are you some kind of gatekeeper on what is acceptable or not on this site? Please do not reference me again for no reason.

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awnlee jawking 🚫

@Blurp

You don't like Tantrayaan's work. That's fine. I do.

I think we've got that message loud and clear.

I thought it suspicious that you created a list to extol Tantrayaan's two major works before they were even finished.

AJ

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Blurp 🚫

@awnlee jawking

So what? Who are you to tell me what and when I should read something? I liked his works from the beginning. You don't. I think everyone has got that message loud and clear. But you still stick around on these posts. You don't like something fine. Who cares?

Stop acting like your opinion is important or that it matters. I don't respond to your whiny posts on this forum - but you pulled in for no reason.

You reek of jealousy. You didn't need to reference me for having a laugh. I am a reader here and I get to choose who I like and I don't like.

jamie_oliver 🚫

@awnlee jawking

Cheapshot.

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awnlee jawking 🚫

@jamie_oliver

Cheapshot.

Undeniably.

AJ

Franzfall0105 🚫

@Tantrayaan

Given the good rating and the good references I'm trying Their Wonder Years. I've read only the first chapter but I've enjoyed it so far and I'll keep reading.

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Tantrayaan 🚫

@Franzfall0105

Cheers! Thank you.

jamie_oliver 🚫

@Tantrayaan

Your last two chapters have been great. Really enjoyed the football action in the story after a while. The game was very well written.

I especially enjoyed Devi's return. It has been a while since she was in the story.

The fourth estate chapter has really shaken things up. Looking forward to seeing how you're ending this arc.

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Franzfall0105 🚫
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@jamie_oliver

I keep reading Their Wonder Years and I'm enjoying it a lot. It's really good.

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Tantrayaan 🚫

@Franzfall0105

Thank you. I am honored. Very happy to hear that you like it.

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